Friday, August 19, 2011

Chapter 2 -- Before

"Where are the children?!"

The door slammed open when Lancet was going to open it. A huge and ugly looking man stepped in and pushed him aside with a very rude gesture. His mother quickly helped him to get up and hug him and Cairo.


" Where's the children!? Spit it out, Glaive!I know you're hiding them!" roared the stranger.

His father looked utterly shocked and tried to bargained with the man for the sake of his family members' life. His action were useless and this angered the man. The man pulled out his sword and slashed Lancet and Cairo's unarmed father's shoulder. When he tried to slash Lancet, Glaive threw himself in front of him, using his back to block the sword. While the sword was stucked in his spine, Glaive resist the unimaginable pain and shouted at Lancet.


" Lancet! Bring Cairo and run! Run away from here! Their after the two of you!!!"
" No! Father!!!"

"Run!!! I said Run!!!"


Lancet had no choice but to pulled his sister's hand which was clinging onto their mother's arms away and dashed out from the house.....

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(Why are the bandits after us?)

He climbed up to the attic which was burnt into half. Their larder was located there, where they store their food. He took a bag and pushed all the food into it. He climbed down again and looked at his parents again. He noticed the necklaces his parents wearing were of the same. The silver necklaces are of the shape of a javelin. He knelt down and remove them. Before leaving, Lancet wanted to give his parents a goodbye kiss but hestitated because their bodies are rotting away and he would not fancy the feeling of kissing a rotting body. He then only used his forehead to touch theirs.


Lancet ran out from the house and brought his sister down the tree. He then helped her to wear the necklace which belonged to their mother. He too wore the other one which belonged to their father. The silver surface of the necklaces glittered as the moonlight shone on it.

 

" Here Cairo, have a bread,"


"Thank you, brother Lancet," Cairo smiled.

After they had their dinner, Lancet and Cairo walk back into the forest again. Their destination is the neighbouring town which required them to cross the forest.


2 comments:

  1. you can try to explain more detail to overall environment & situation that character feeling & facing.

    like: how's the village being destroy? whole village in fire? the bloody hell bandit killing the whole villages and throw the body everywhere looks terrible?

    Gambateh ~

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  2. thankxx for your comment~! i think i'm being too hasty in my story line~ always wanting the story to go on...i guess should slow down and describe more of the place and settings~btw, how do you find the story going? ^^

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